im miserable

[Miss_octopus]

every day...i see alot of faces and i dont feel lonely because i hear so many voices.......i wonder what does it mean loneliness.....but when i knew you....you turned my life head over heel...and you fell a place in my heart and you captured my soul so deep...baby tell me why you went far away i couldnt resist your love...i didnt even try
now all the faces i used to see mean nothing to me...all the voices i used to hear had no affect on me
now im miserable ..now i know what does it mean to be alone
now im lonely..now and since you were gone
so dont cause more pain baby please...will you come back again cause i cant stand this misery
and i dont want to be miserable for too long
so i will whisper your name to the stars
maybe the stars know where you are
and ill pass oceans and seas
just to see you right here next to me
i want to feel the happniess again..i dont want it to be my impossible dream..i dont want to cry all my tears
(to my only love....forgive me....im sorry)

[بنت العرب]

المختفية في الظل

So much emotion is expressed and what you wrote is very touching
However, watch out for the basic punctuation
Also....watch out for how you phrase some of the sentences
For an example: i wonder what does it mean loneliness
This is not right grammatically....
I wonder what loneliness means...is the corrector version


Hope to read more by you :)

[Miss_octopus]

hi bent al arab
thankx honey for ur nice words
sorry for the grammer mistakes but im still a rookie
and dont worry cuz it was a honest mistake
otherwise
thankx alot
i will try to write more correctly next time
yala see ya

[سحابة]

you are ***** shadow


سحابة....
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[تم تعديل الموضوع بواسطة بنت العرب يوم 09-10-2001 في 08:56 AM]